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Edward.Marlo.Ruiz's avatar

Very great opening. I believe the characterization and tight dialogue really dragged me into this. Everything flows super well and mark ups of explanation are in character and placed in great places. Really like what you have going on here and it really is reminiscent of Gatsby but put into modernity. Love the air of mysticism.

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Rebecca Rocket's avatar

Thanks, EMR! Annaleigh is quite an enigmatic character. And I'm so glad you enjoyed the dialogue! Makes me feel like my screenwriting degree comes in handy for something 🤣 Hope you continue to get sucked into my little modern Gatsby tale! Appreciate you reading 🥰

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Maryellen Brady 💗📚's avatar

Ok this is my bed time story for tonight. Bookmarked & anticipation is already bubbling. Squee 💗🙌💗

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Rebecca Rocket's avatar

I hope you enjoy it! My chapters are very brief.

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